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Dear Mrs Obama,

If you would re-evaluate some of your health initiatives that have been implemented in schools the past few years, then you will see that while most are beneficial to all students some place the health of some above the rights of others.

An example is the healthier lunch initiatives. It is reasonable to remove foods and drinks that are overly sugary, overly fattening, or have too many calories. However, other foods that aren't necessarily "healthy", are being removed as well, and these foods should stay in schools. For these foods that are "mild junk foods", if a child becomes obese as a result of these foods it shouldn't be the schools to blame for serving them, but it is the fault of the student for choosing to eat those foods. The parents, responsible for raising their kids, would be to blame(cumulative). Their priority being education and safety, schools should not have to worry about the perceived health problems (periodic). Also, if absolutely none of these sweet foods are available, then the same children who are susceptible to obesity will eat even more of them at home. Therefore, taking such extreme measures to remove foods that shouldn't be removed is not minimizing health risks, and in some cases compounding them. Also, many kids who are able to make healthy choices for themselves are being punished because of others' choices. Being able to make wise decisions, they can have access to "junk foods" without overindulging (periodic). There is a small 16 year old boy in Saline, a town in southern Michigan. He has been getting Sun-Chips practically before remembrance (so since he was 14). The boy always made healthy decisions, and was by no means in danger of becoming over-weight. But now, as a result of your extremist initiatives, now he is left to settle for a smaller bag of Sun-Chips that also contains pretzels.

That small boy is me. My classmates and I have watched as more snacks have been removed from schools simply because they have too many calories. Longing we have each day for a small, reasonable unhealthy snack (inverted). Calories, being dependent on a number of factors, are no definitive measure of healthiness or not(cumulative). Large bags of natural fruit snacks have disappeared because they have many calories, but now diet-sodas are freely available in our cafeteria. The purpose of your campaign is to increase health, so it would make sense to target foods and drinks, like diet soda, that are legitimately harmful to kids, than to go on a witch hut of foods have such a number of calories. Poorly aimed are your efforts, targeting the wrong sources of obesity (inverted).

Sincerely yours, from the kid who wants his bag of Garden Salsa Sun-Chips,
Matt Lougheed


Sentence Length Challenge    CUMULATIVE / PERIODIC
Cumulative- The hobbit traveled to Mordor, leaving the Shire, adventuring with his friends, meeting various species, befriending a creature named Golem, being stabbed by a sword, loosing his friend and mentor to death only to have him be reincarnated, almost being eaten by a large spider, crossing rivers and fields, destroying the one ring to control all of Middle Earth, after his uncle's 111th birthday party. (64)
Periodic- Playing tennis at a tournament, partying with his awesome friends, watching How I Met Your Mother on Netflix for eight hours straight, playing the fun video game Destiny, modeling in a photo shoot, going to Speedway twice to buy a succulent slushy, eating half of a delicious apple pie, Matt procrastinated this project until Sunday unlike most of my classmates probably did. (62)