Style Day 1- Revision

Revision

Too often I used complex sentences, and used the same structure for them. I even used the same subordinating conjunction. Other than that, I think that I used a good variety of sentences.

Who hasn't dreamed of creating their own world, or being able to read and change the minds of others CP? How about being an international criminal mastermind pulling off the greatest heist of all time S? Inception ties the fantasies of anyone who loves a good action movie into a mind-bending, action packed thriller. S

The story is of Dom Cobb, who uses military technology to perform corporate espionage in the one place that everyone thinks is safe, safer even than Fort Knox: their minds CPX. Cobb is on the run from the American government S. Then he is approached by a powerful Japanese business man with an offer Cobb can't refuse C. The business man will use his connections to have Cobb's charges dropped, if he and his team can pull off the impossible act of inception CP. To pull of inception, Cobb has to devise a strategy to plant an idea in the mind of for a change instead of merely stealing one S. The change seams simple enough, but Cobb and his team have to dive deep into the mind of Fischer, facing unexpected enemies from both Fischer’s mind as well as their own CPX.

Inception is the pinnacle of science fiction and action, and it achieves this by merging the best of both into one of the best movies of all time CP. The movie pulls viewers in with its beautiful cinematography S. It is directed and produced by Christopher Nolan, the director of the immensely popular Dark Knight trilogy S. He brought his experience to this movie, and though the results are shots that are extremely dark and dramatic, they are also hauntingly beautiful CPX. But what keeps audiences on their seats is the plot that keeps viewers guessing what will come next, and it always catches the audience by surprise CPX. Together, both the directing and the story create a movie that is entertaining to watch many times X.

The movie is also helped by the talented actors S. Even though Leonardo DiCaprio has never won an Oscar, he is one of the greatest modern actors X. This action movie's cast is not usual, because it does not revolve around any single talented actor X. DeCaprio plays a spectacular character, but it is not his usual charismatic man CP. This leads to a protagonist who is more relate able to viewers S. They are able to connect with him because of ____, so they in turn become more invested emotionally into the movie CPX. The movie is a much richer experience as a result of the actors S.